In Competition No. 3196, you were invited to supply a reply to the poet from Frances Cornford’s fat woman or Shakespeare’s dark lady. Philip Roe and George Simmers both reminded me that G.K. Chesterton set the bar high with ‘The Fat White Woman Speaks’, his response to Cornford’s triolet (which was also parodied by A.E. Housman). The fat woman clearly moved competitors too (‘It’s always a welcome opportunity to have a go at one of the most unpleasant but mind-worm poems in the English language,’ writes Brian Murdoch; and here’s G.M. Southgate: ‘This poem haunted me… when I was young. It seemed to me so very sad, and cruel too.’) Replies to Cornford significantly outnumbered those to the Bard.
Among those who did give voice to the dark lady, Peter Butler-Way’s suitably bawdy response to Sonnet 151 and Nigel Stuart’s riposte to Sonnet 141 stood out. Others deserving an honourable mention in a large and accomplished postbag are Nick Syrett, C. Paul Evans and Richard Spencer. Those entries printed below nab the prizes this week, earning their authors £25 each.
“In mocking me as dark thou speak’st not fair,In damning me as cruel thou speakest ill;Why should I not my favours widely share?For, weak-willed Will, my will loves where it will.I do not lie — I lie where’er I choose;Thy spear is not alone that shak’st in me.And yet, for all thy scorn, I’ll be thy museAnd revel in my immortality.When ’twixt my sheets, thou art a comedyOf errors, for i’ faith there’s much adoFor nothing; ’tis not as it liketh me;The labour of thy love is lost — adieu!Though thou deniest me honour and a name,I’ll titles give thee for thy lasting fame.Nicholas Hodgson
“E’er since you told the world my breasts be dunYour wife has known by whom they’ve been undone.And she may wonder how far you’ve progressedWith other parts of me which you’ve undressedAs from my eager dark moist lips you supTo drain the nightly joys of love’s sweet cup,And in my wiry muff to parse love’s grammarWhich drives thy deep-dipped quill’s insistent clamour.Yea, dark I be in all my privvy partsYet deeper-dark am I in love’s dark arts.Now of my skills should Anne be sore afearedAnd you to her now somewhat less endeared.Mayhap you should withdraw this latest sonnet,Else may your marriage end in grief upon it.Martin Parker
“Thou blind fool, Will, to write that Love is blindAnd mystifies thy vision, being troubledBy twofold thoughts of me. It is thy mind,Divided in itself, that has me doubledAs fair and sullied, valentine and whore.Thus men resolve their inner turbulenceBy casuistry, contumacious lore,High-flown, rhapsodic verse and vain pretence.As for your heart, whose blessing makes me seemIdeal albeit blameworthy in truth,Construe its wild commotion as a dream,An ague of the sentiments, forsooth,That racks the sleeping lover till he wakesAnd rises healthy for our two selves’ sakes.Basil Ransome-Davies
“You ask why I walk through the fields in gloves?Missing so much and so much?Cos I’m burying bags of dismembered remainsOf nosy, sad poets whom nobody loves,Who go around looking at women from trainsAssuming so much and so much,Judging their BMI, calling them names,So mind your own business or be like the bloke whoSits opposite doing his bloody SudokuOr read and stop being a right nosy-poke whoIs dissing so much and so much.David Silverman
“O why do you sit in your first-class seat nursing unmet desires,while I stroll between lovers you’ll never meet?O why do you sit in your first-class seat,when your blood should glow with ungoverned heatlike a locomotive’s fires?O why do you sit in your first-class seatnursing unmet desires?O why do you use such Georgian rhymein your haughty triolet?Your ‘gloves’ and ‘doves’ are prosodic crime.O why do you use such Georgian rhyme?Are you trapped in a Cambridge paradigmunder Darwin-Wedgwood sway?O why do you use such Georgian rhymein your haughty triolet?Nick MacKinnon
“Shall I tell you precisely, Ms Cornford — nay, Frances —Why I walk through the fields thus accoutred?One has to observe protocol, the nuancesDe rigueur when invited to dinners and dances,One simply conforms under the circumstances,The reason I’m suited and booted;Plus my stealth-bomb selection of come-hither glances,Strategically, coyly computed.Whereas you and your cohort, Ms Cornford, dear Frances,(I believe it is commonly mooted)Don’t indulge in such frivolous, fatuous fancies,Won’t dip a toe in the water, take chances,Flirtatiously fend off fine fellows’ advances;In the ways of the world, so untutored.Disdainful of random and risqué romances,You’re tragic, emotionally neutered.Mike Morrison
No. 3199: I spy
Are we facing a future in which we are spied on not only by Alexa, Siri and Cortana but also by our mattress, our vacuum cleaner, even our children’s toys? You are invited to supply a poem in which an inanimate object comments on its owner’s behaviour. Please email entries of up to 16 lines to firstname.lastname@example.org by midday on 12 May.